Content: 3/3 - Interesting story here for McGrattan. It's different than others stories we've seen here. You seem like a promising player and member to this league, and I'm glad to see people with initiative to get their name put out there. Good luck in the upcoming season!
Grammar: 1.50/2 - Being raised by immigrant parents, I can understand how hard English is to learn. Draper covered all of your mistakes, but I'm going to be a bit more lenient on the grammar here. In time, even just through writing more media spots, you'll see what mistakes to avoid in the future. It was a great effort.
Presentation: 1/1 - Could've been organized a bit better but good overall.
Pros: 2/2 - Hockey players shouldn't just be skilled, but mental strength also goes a long way.
Cons: 2/2 - Many hockey players are humble and soft spoken. We could use a hot head like McGrattan.
Overall: 9.50/10
Final: 9/10