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Once a highly touted prospect with the Brampton Blades in the VHLM, Jarome Iginla went on an extended leave of absence and ultimately skewed his chances for success with the Blades. 

 

Jarome had his chances with the Brampton Blades, and he made the most of them while he was with the team. In 21 games with the Blades in Season 38, he amassed 18 points, 5 goals, and 13 assists. This was astonishing to most, as Jarome had been playing with a base build for most of the season. However, around the 25 game mark, Jarome decided to take a leave of absence. He left the Brampton Blades in a bad position as they had been fighting to make it into the playoffs, and the scoring touch of Iginla just left them that short of a playoff berth. 

 

With the remaining 38 games to be played, the Brampton Blade once superstar went on the biggest slump of his career. Not knowing how he came to the rink and played those games, Jarome Iginla scored a total of 0 points in his final 38 games, enough to have him become the biggest nobody in the VHLM. 

 

Everyone wondered, what did really happen to Jarome? What happened to this superstar we once heard of and watched play? Well, the answer is simple. Jarome had a horrible past, his father was a drug addict, and his mother was an alcoholic. He encountered many types of abuse in his household growing up, and well, he needed to run away from it. Jarome found himself a home at the Edmonton Childrens Home for Males when he was just 14 years old. His parents not knowing he wanted to run away from home wanted to find out what happened to their young son. They filed police reports days on end, hoping to bring home their lost son. The couple from Red Deer, Alberta hoped that their young boy had still been alive. Jarome asked his caretakers at the children's home to never reveal his name to any faculty member here. Jarome was soon living under the alias of Jordin FourFour for the rest of his teen years. 

 

It had been six months since Jarome came here, he met a few friends who enjoyed watching the Edmonton Oilers play and Jarome ended up gaining a strong passion for the sport of hockey. After the cinderella cup run the Oilers had, Jarome suddenly had the idea that he wanted to be a hockey player when he grew up. He got a couple of his buddies and they went to the local pond and strapped on some loaner skates. After 3 years of practicing night and day on that pond, Jarome ended up going back to Edmonton to reunite with his parents. Upon arrival, he was surprised by what his disappearance had done to them. His parents now lived in a two story house, which was beautiful, in the posch part of Red Deer. Both of his parents had stopped their substance abuse, and now were successful people. Jarome was very happy for his parents for turning their lives around, then it came into his mind "what if they don't need me anymore?" "What if they are better off without me?" Jarome contemplated leaving again to go back to that children's home. Before he could see his parents, he left. 

 

Jarome continued onto his life, and played for Brampton and that leads us to where we started, where did Jarome go? Simple, Jarome felt so sad about what he did to his parents that he decided to go back and visit them. When he arrived at his household nobody was there, the house was abandoned. He went around asking questions and he finally found out the truth about his parents. They had been murdered by one of his old friends at the Children's center. Jarome was devastated and ultimately felt he would never be fit to play the sport he had once loved. 

 

It has taken Jarome 4 months of healing and he is still not even the same man he used to be. He missed half a season with the Brampton Blades, and another half with the Saskatoon Wild. Jarome is now not looking to be the player he used to be, he wants to create another legacy for himself, one that honors the Edmonton Children's home, one that honors his dedication to the game, and one, that honors his parents. 

 

 

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Content: 3/3

743 words. What a great, but incredibly sad story. You developed the story well and ended it with a nice tribute. I've told you a lot lately, but I've been super impressed with your work ethic. Keep it up.

Grammar: 1.75/2

A lot of minor things, but nothing too severe.

 

25 game = 25-game

games, = games;

Childrens = Children's

 

His parents not knowing he wanted to run away from home wanted to find out what happened to their young son.  = His parents, not knowing he wanted to run away from home, wanted to find out what happened to their young son.

 

cinderella = Cinderella

two story = two-story

posch = posh

around, then = around, and then

one, that = one that

Appearance: 1/1

You had a picture in there. I think for next time, adding a title or some color wouldn't hurt at all. This was fine though.

Overall: 5.75/6

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Don;t worry about Cuffy he doesn't know what a grade is as he has never submitted a PT.

 

I know Cuffy from SHL lol, he's on my team. Just because I am new on VHL doesn't mean I don't know SHL members. Such as Cuffy and yourself CJ

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I know Cuffy from SHL lol, he's on my team. Just because I am new on VHL doesn't mean I don't know SHL members. Such as Cuffy and yourself CJ

Yeah I know you would, I was on his team there and here. Finally got through the suffering
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Can this be given a second grade already? Everything in here has been graded. It honestly seems like the only person doing his grading job is Svodoba. 

The grading crews have been doing an upstanding job since the move over to this site from what I have noticed.  They are currently down one writing grader and are currently hiring. 

 

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You're exactly right, Svoboda is the only one who does his job. I grade on average 2 articles/month. I should be fired. Maybe you could have my spot? I'm sure you wouldn't let an article go ungraded up until thursday, thats just madness. You know, you typically get updated on Sundays, so Thursday is pretty risky! Additionally, you wouldn't let anything your real life get in the way of grading someones media spot! Unlike me, you have your priorities straight. Finally, if some chatted you to grade this 40 hours after it was posted, you would do it. You're hired! 

 

Anyways, onto not doing my job:

 

 

Content: 3/3

Nice first media spot. A little bit on the somber side, but good nonetheless. 

 

Grammar: 1.75/2

Slobo got them all I believe.

 

Appearance: 1/1

Looks good. Would definitely add a title and maybe some other editing to make it look cleaner.

 

Overall: 5.75

FINAL: 6/6

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Ahem. Yes, that may have been a slight over reaction.

But seriously Hawk, we try to get these done as fast as we can but, like Smarch said, we're down a couple people right now and we're looking to add some guys to the team. I actually intended on grading this when you asked me yesterday, but it seems that it slipped my mind. I would say 2-3 days is probably the average wait time for a final grade lately. 

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