Showcase

[Mack71 37]

I’m dominant the jr showcase the best stats in my career by far and I can’t stop thinking about first line because I’m on second line but I’m dominant so far I really want go on first line and because i think I can help more and score more points and get goals for the team and win more but I need to stop taking penalties because I been getting lots of penalties and I’m third or second best right wing in the WHLM draft so I want to be able to get more playing time and I have a good plan for tpe to get better and more goals and more assists in WHLM and I’m 11th best player in this junior showcase and that’s exciting for me to see this I asked my coach if I could move up the lineup so that I can be able do more they didn’t answer me and I ok with it because of my self awareness and I just want my teammates to be successful and then they going to be drafted like me and then I can get play against them or my teammates never know if they are my teammates in my future and then I will be in VHL and I have best life giving out free food and drinks to homeless and random people and I will be there for people that struggle I know but in the jr showcase I’m in the 24 point range and I’m getting 1 point every game mostly for my team I’m excited to see what happens in jr showcase playoffs for my team this is exciting for me and my teammates as well as coaches for our team in the jr showcase I hope we can do really well in the playoffs and destroy the teams in jr showcase and win the jr showcase then after the showcase I’m gonna 3 days rest before training camp so my body is ready for it and I’m gonna be competing for my spot on the roster and I have to go hard on these guys because I’m just the rookie of the team and I’m gonna try to get rookie of the year and I am not gonna stop working my but off to win it because I’m competing with great players and I want to see what I can do with my career so after jr showcase playoff I’m in beast mode after showcase tournament the showcase was fun to play and the team did really good in my opinion so on the 3 days of rest I I’m gonna with my family and friends because the draft is soon and I’m excited for it showcase was great opportunity for me but it’s time to go to next stage of my career and development I’m excited to move on with my career and development because it’s gonna be so hard and great opportunity for me to show my passion for the game and show after the showcase 

Edited July 30 by Mack71

[Greg_Di 1,024]

Review:
 

@Mack71 I think this is a little short for a media spot. Media spots have to be 500+ words. This one comes in at 238. I don't know if you meant this to be a vhl.com article? Needs some punctuation as well as its a very long run-on sentence. The idea and topic is great but needs to be outlined better and have more content. Keep going off this idea to add another 250 words, maybe add an interview with your player at the bottom or maybe describe some of the games your player played in or even his final stats in the junior showcase. Rating 1/10 until minimum length is reached.

[Mack71 37]

I know it’s is I’m not done yet I accidentally submitted it to thing

Edited July 29 by Mack71