Drosmis Sarkanis - From the local youth team to Saskatoon Wilds (Theme Week)

[Mr Bohannan 116]

Drosmis Sarkanis was only four years old when he first turned his attention to hockey. It was a cold winter evening in his native Riga, Latvia, and the city was filled with cheering crowds of fans of the local hockey team. His father Arthur, who had played hockey in his youth and had a deep love for the game, had brought little Drosmis to his first hockey game. The cheers in the crowd, the sounds of sticks clashing, the players crashing on the ice, completely captured Drosmis's attention like nothing, never before.

 

During the game, Drosmis's wide eyes followed the puck with unwavering attention. He marveled at the agility and speed of the players, their ability to maneuver on the ice and the tremendous power output. By the time the final whistle blew and the players skated off the field, leaving behind a trail of scraped ice, the Drosmis had decided. He turned to his father and announced: "I want to play hockey."

 

Arthur was both surprised and delighted. "Are you sure?" he asked looking into his son's serious expression.

 

Drosmis nodded vigorously. "I want to be like them!"

 

From that moment on, Arthur knew that his son had found his passion. The next morning, he took Drosmi to the local ice rink, where the young hockey players trained under the coach's watchful eyes. The thrill of Drosmis was obvious as he put on his skates and stepped onto the ice. He fell several times, getting up each time and determinedly trying to stay on the ice. Arthur watched from the sidelines, pride filling his chest.

 

As the years passed, Drosmis's dedication only increased. He spent every free moment on the ice honing his skills and learning the nuances of the game. By the age of six, he was already playing in the local youth league, and his perseverance and talent set him apart from his peers. He adored watching his VHL idols play and hoped to one day play in the VHL himself.

 

His parents wholeheartedly supported his dream. They drove him to early morning practices, cheered him on at games, and devoted all their time to attending out-of-town games. His mother, Elina, sewed him shirts and made sure he always had a hot meal after practice. Despite the financial strain, they never doubted their son's determination and potential.

 

By the time Drosmis was ten years old, he was the leader of his team and his name began to circulate among scouts as the next potential star. His speed, vision and puck-handling skills were second to none and his passion for the game was abundant. Coaches marveled at his work ethic and discipline, rare for such a young player.

 

At the age of fourteen, Drosmis was offered a place at a prestigious hockey academy in Finland, known as an academy that had trained many VHL stars. It was a dream come true, but also a daunting challenge. Moving away from home, tougher competition and living in a foreign country were obstacles that tested his resolve.

 

But Drosmis accepted the challenge with the same commitment he had shown in that very first fatal game to which his father had taken him. He knew that every step, every struggle was part of the path to his ultimate goal. His parents sacrifices, his own relentless pursuit of excellence, and his unwavering belief that he could be one of the best drove him forward.

 

Now just ten years later Drosmis is finally on his final stretch that is going to take him to the end. Just signing the contract with Saskatoon Wilds he has finally arrived at VHLM and that means only one thing - VHL soon!

Edited June 21 by Mr Bohannan

[Anomalijs 29]

Overall i think the text was really simple and easy to read, but maybe a little bit too simple, Firstly it gets a bit too repetitive. Certain themes and phrases are repeated, which can make the text feel redundant. Secondly the dialogue between Drosmis and his father is quite basic and could be more engaging or reflective of their characters and relationship. The text also feels lack of realism, there arent any obstacles in Drosmis life mentioned or anything, therefore the text is not as engaging for the reader as it could be.

Otherwise great 7/10