Duncan Jeffers Rookie Profile [1/2]

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Duncan Jeffers Rookie Profile

 

Height: 6’6”

Handiness: Left

Weight: 245 lbs

Jersey Number: #13

Hometown: Buffalo, NY

Born: January 13, 2002

 

Strengths

Jeffers is an all-around team player. He likes to be physical from the moment he steps off the bench to the moment he steps right back on. He is the least selfish player imaginable, debuting in the VHLM with 7 points, and 7 assists. This man on the ice likes to take control and run the team himself. His defense is outstanding and knows how to get in front of a shot. His passing is a great asset to the team and his game. In college, he had the most assists by one player on the team.  Jeffers’ vision of the ice is almost as bright as day, his awareness of what's around him at all times is fantastic

 

Weaknesses

Jeffers weaknesses vary all over the ice. If a player on the opposing team gets in his mind Duncan will take it personally hard on himself and not perform to his maximum the rest of the game. Just like any other sports players he has a few bad games in his career since childhood and during those game has really looked back on what he could’ve done better, but he uses those mistakes and is continuing to perfect his game from it.

 

Career Goals/Predictions

Duncan Jeffers has been waiting all his life to make his run in the VHL and is so close now being picked up by the Las Vegas Aces in the VHLM. Within a few seasons, he will make that leap and start playing for a great team in the VHL. Jeffers stated that by the end of his rookie season he would like to have 25 points, already coming into the league with 7 this might be a valid goal to be able to reach. By retirement, Duncan would love to have a solid 250 points if not more. He is still waiting for that game to score his first goal and it definitely will be a special one when that happens. Duncan is a growing player and continues to get better each and every day. He would love to move up on the depth chart as fast as possible and soon be playing with the first line. He really thinks by the end of this season he will be able to show off his skill and make an impact on the VHLM.

 

Team Player

Jeffers has so far shown to be a team player with 7 assists. He has bonded well with his teammates on and off the ice and realizes this isn't just a team its a brotherhood. Getting guidance from former linemates and GM has been a great start to the VHLM. Getting to know everyone really has been a blast. The chemistry of the Las Vegas Aces is amazing, everyone is always talking to each other and is not leaving anyone out.

 

Conclusion

All in all Duncan Jeffers is an outstanding fast developing defenseman in the VHLM. He can’t wait to show everyone what he can do this season and can’t wait for even more seasons to come. He really hopes to make it big in the VHL someday and hopes that day is very soon.

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Review:

 

There is so much bold! Use bold font to accentuate something, otherwise its going to make blocks of text that nobody wants to read. It leads the readers eye to believe that nothing is important rather than everything. Your use of Headers is really good but by god please fix your font.

 

moving on...

 

On 3/11/2019 at 10:32 AM, Tophdaddy said:

Height: 6’6”

 

On 3/11/2019 at 10:32 AM, Tophdaddy said:

Weight: 245 lbs

 

Big boy. What position does he play?

 

On 3/11/2019 at 10:32 AM, Tophdaddy said:

Weaknesses

 

Try to have a minimum of three weaknesses listed. For this and Strengths, you may want to break them up into lists to make them easier to read.

 

On 3/11/2019 at 10:32 AM, Tophdaddy said:

Team Player

 

This should be nested under strengths.

 

Lots of opportunities for improvement here in terms of formatting, and the content is a bit thin. I'd give this one another once-over, break it down to be a tad more categorical, and tell us more about him than big boi is good at hockey and people like him.