Welcome to the VHL, Bacon

[Bacon 40]

So close, yet so far away

Bacon's journey to the VHLM

                                                                                                          Bacon! Bacon! Bacon!

 

That name? Oh it's nothing but the hound's newest starting goalie from russia. So, who is bacon? Well for starters, he's a fierce young man with the ambition to become one of the greatest goalies in VHL. Here's a secret: he wasn't always into hockey, WHAT?! shocker, i know, but he didn't start until 8th grade. Why wait so long?  Mainly because of his parents work and his rest of the family were in america until his grandparents moved back to mother russia.

So . . . What kind of player is he? Ambitious, tough, strong, deligent,kind,smart, rarely gets into fights but what i believe is most important, he is positive. He is also a defensive mind kind of player, mainly due to being a defender from 8-10 grade until he became a goalie since 11th grade.

 

Throughout his high school career, he was a good but not great defender. Main issue? Balance. He tried to fix this issue up until he became a goalie realizing, he enjoyed that position and loved it with passion, winning goalie of the year gold as a senior and goalie of the year silver as a junior. Once he graduated, he recieved a letter from multiple russian leagues to join them, however, he chose the VHL, due to low population of goalies, it will give him a huge chance to prove himself as one of the best goalie's in VHL. Once he entered free agency, He was greeted by a letter from Berocka, welcoming him to the league and sending him an offer to his team,the Mississauga Hounds who are currently fighting for the last playoff position. Bacon accepted the position and was greeted by his teammates, who helped encourage him and mentored him so far. He wrote a letter to his team after his first few games thanking them: 

 

 

"I am writing this after my first few games and although my first 2 games didn't go into the right direction, i felt the proper experience from these games and fixed many of my weaknesses and gains strengths. before these games, I've recieved plenty of answers to my questions,help,and even encouragement from my team. Although ive been through a rough start, I feel confident that I can get better thanks to the GM, Berocka and many of my teammates encouragment. I'd also like to thank Berocka for taking the chance on recruiting me. I hope together we can end this season wonderfully.      -Bacon"

 

Bacon's first game

He started his 1st game playing the full 60:00 min. Accumulating a total of 17 saves out of 21 shots, giving him a .810 saving percentage. Despite his efforts, they lost that game against the san diego marlins 4-1 but Nonetheless, he placed some good numbers on his 1st game.

 

Bacon's first win

on game 213 vs Mexico City Kings, Bacon was a winner. The goalie stacked up 22 saves from 24 shots and a .917 saving percentage. His team went on to win 4-2 that game with an impressive 3rd period comeback that racked up 3 goals.

His thoughts on his first win: " Im estatic and happy to finally win and do something impressive but im ready to move onto the next games and help my team to the playoffs. Respect to the Kings for a great game".

 

Final thoughts

This rookie has the potential of becoming one of the greatest goalies in the league and it helps him even better that he landed on a very supportive team. It is going to be tough, there are going to be some ups and downs for him but he is a kid who can go through them all unfazed. Welcome to the VHL, Bacon.

Word count: 627, claiming for week 4/19/2020

Edited April 13, 2020 by Bacon

[Baozi 1,664]

Decent content for the beginning journey to the VHL for you. Glad to have you aboard here.

 

Some things to look out for to make it a bit easier for others to read. Its nice that you separated out the sections, however try and keep your alignments consistent. You have a mix of left alignment and centered alignment. Try avoid connecting too many of your run on sentences together with just commas.

 

ie ( Once he graduated, he recieved a letter from multiple russian leagues to join them, however, he chose the VHL, due to low population of goalies, it will give him a huge chance to prove himself as one of the best goalie's in VHL.)

 

Can be reworded to be multiple sentences or at the very least needs to be reconstructed possibly to "Once he graduated, he received letters of offer to join multiple Russian leagues. Bacon chose to join the VHL instead due to the low population of goalies which would give him a huge chance to prove himself as one of the best goalies in the VHL." You do this alot when you are trying to convey several points. Try making several sentences instead.

 

You may want to be more consistent with spacing of your quotations ie (I hope together we can end this season wonderfully.      -Bacon) vs (I hope together we can end this season wonderfully." - Bacon and things like your spacing after using commas.

 

Also consider adding pictures or coloring to your post in order to alleviate just a block of text.

 

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