Dayne eager to prove himself

[Infernal 166]

"I'm excited to be here and can't wait to get things started." Dayne tells the reporters. The 6-foot 203-pound center man went 40th overall in the S72 VHLM Dispersal Draft. Dayne said he was frustrated to see that he was dropping in the, draft but was happy to be selected by the Mexico City Kings. Last season Dayne nearly hoisted the Founders Cup, but the San Diego Marlins fell to the Ottawa Lynx in the semifinal, only winning two games. “We didn’t think we would get that far, but to come so close and not win it all, it kind of just hangs over you all offseason.” Coming into this season his current squad, the Kings did not do nearly as well last season. Mexico City finished dead last in the VHLM last season with only 28 points. However, with a strong draft the Kings look to rebound this season. “We have a really good group here, and we all get along quite well, and we are all just hungry to win.” Dayne told the media. “I just want to come in do my best and make those other teams regret passing on THE SWORD OF THE MORNING!” screamed Dayne, who then proceeded to stare at the cameras and slowly walk away, leaving reporters stunned.

 

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Edited May 21, 2020 by Infernal

[ROOKIE745 604]

Review time once again.

 

This is a fun little article showing some personalty for Arthur Dayne, mainly from the end which got a chuckle out of me. My grammar isn't the best and I'm sure I make lot's of little mistakes that drives people up a wall so usually I don't point this kind of stuff out but there was no need for the coma after "the" and before "draft" however that's very small mistake and not worth getting worked up over. This article covers quite a bit for the new player Arthur Dayne, mentioning both how close he got to the Founders cup last and up to the current point where he's been drafted by Mexico, and also mentioning how he like many of us always ask the "what if" question during the offseason when the team we play for makes it fairly far into the playoffs. Dayne voices his frustration as well as the drive for him and his teammates to do better next season, and he has reason to be hopeful thanks to the strong draft for Mexico as noted here. This is a good read but lacks that extra punch of detail, like maybe having a picture or just being a little more expressive the whole way through instead of just at the end, still I've seen much worse so I'll give it a 6/10