creed rant 3 (houston agm,philly gm,being called up to the vhl)

[assassin6898 81]

hello and welcome back to creed rant my biweekly rants about my guy and everything about the vhl/vhlm. so this week we will be talking about agm hunt for assassin and mabey the gm hunt for him as well also taking about how close is creed coming up to the vhl for the dc dragons so with all that lets get right into it. so first is the creed applying for the agm spot of houston. last week creed applied to be the agm of Houston his goal is to go from agm to gm of a team in the future and the agm spot for Houston seems like the right spot at this time for him as he just came into the league back in January has learned so much about how the vhl/vhlm works with also how the agm and gms work some what. when asked about what he would do as the agm of Houston he said this "well ill be taking it one day at a time looking at free agency, looking at trades, and looking at inform the gm on who we should resign/draft for the season/upcoming season and ill do the same with trades ask if we could get this guy in a trade and so on the goal for me in the end though is to become a gm of a team in the future and that is my goal if i do get the job of agm of houston ill be glad and thankful for the opportunity. and work hard as ive heard that the locker room in pretty quite and i think they can use a agm to liven things up in thier but who ever gets the job i just want to say congrats and good luck at being a agm for houston". with this in mind we now move on to the gm spot creed is also applying for in Philadelphia when asked about it he said "if i don't get a job as agm of houston then i might try to be the gm of phil and prove that i can be a great gm and lead a team to the playoffs and win but we will see how far ill make it as if i get to be agm of houston or not then ill worry about the gm spot of Philadelphia but if i get offed both and have to choose one i have to take the spot of philly as its a big step and i need to prove i can do stuff if either the gm of houston sees this or who ever is naming the gm of philly or if both see it i hope you guys take a chance on me and choose me to be the next agm of Houston or the next gm of philly and who ever gets those jobs if i don't i want to say again congrats and good luck at the job". now on to the final part of the rant this week this week is about the near sight of creed reaching the vhl this season as he has reach 231 tpa last week he is nearing his goal of 250 he is hoping to make the most out of it and make it far into the vhlm playoffs his hope is that he can get the starting center postion in dc and have his line name made with @Spartan alex letang and the other penguins fans the line creed has dumbed the penguins line the offense and defense of line 1 that the players are all penguins fans. the work in not easy he said but he has hopes that if he keeps working hard he will make it to the vhl next season. this has been your biweekly creed rant i hoped you enjoyed and cant wait for you to read again

[Spartan 4,552]

Hi creed, quick review for you here. I really like the depth of your rambles which holistically cover most of your activity in the VHL over the past week or so. Well done on applying for more league jobs, excited to see you trying to be more involved in the league. Now for some feedback, my number one thing here is going to be formatting. Large blocks of text, or one massive paragraph is difficult to read, and also difficult for you to go back and proofread to fix any grammatical errors or spelling mistakes. I highly recommend that if you're ever changing the subject and moving on to a new topic, create a new paragraph! A perfect spot for it would have been after you finished talking about applying for the Houston AGM job and then started talking to the Philly GM job. Splitting it into a new paragraph would be amazing. In addition, remember to capitalize the first letter in each sentence, it also helps a lot in making these posts easier to read! Overall, nicely written with a lot of depth, but make sure to fix some of the formatting and spelling errors, 7/10!