A Story of two Brothers // Game Review in the 'Swiss Central Gazette' Brigade-Royals

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Swiss Central Gazette

 

We understand from our overseas correspondent that Daniel Janser was called into the coaches office after the two losses against the Warriors. Dan did not look happy and dreaded a dressing down, as he felt that he failed to inspire the team to do better than they did. He was wondering whether the captaincy would be taken from him.

 

The opposite was the case. The coach was happy with Dan's consistency and just wanted to break the good news that he made the first line up. Apparently. Karjalainen could do with a winger with a defensive conscience.

 

The Swiss native was on cloud seven, he did not expect to make such an impression in such a short period of time.

 

To the games played:

 

The first game was won 6-3. Marcel and Daniel contributed 3 and 1 assist respectively and Marcel led the team in shots blocked (5). Daniel's pass to Karjalainen was especially remarkable as it was a pin-point Hail Mary pass which enabled the latter to go one-on-one against the netminder and left him no chance with a brilliantly executed deke, that made Forsberg famous.

 

Karjalainen scored a hattrick and was named 1st Star of the night. Austin Towbreaker with 4 assists and Brendan Marner with 2 goal to his name were named 2nd and 3rd Star.

 

We also wish to appreciate Mike Hroch's solid performance with a .919 save percentage.

 

Unfortunately, the thrill did not last for long as the following game was lost 3-4

 

Dan made it finally to the sin bin, when he was for once out of position and had to deploy unfair means to stop an opposing attacker on a rush. Later on Marcel also was left with no alternative than to trip his opposite number. Luckily, the Royals could not score on either powerplay.

 

Again Hroch showed a respectable performance (.902) but his opposite number The Red Menace did one better (.929).

 

Karjalainen is leading the league in goals (10) as well as points (15, tied with Royals' Biggie Cheese), Marcel is tied 3rd in assists and is leader in shots blocked (31, his body must be bruised from head to toe). He is also third in TOI with over 28 minutes per match.

 

We are confident that this young team will learn from the 3 very close defeats and do better in the future.

 

Shortly before cut off time, rumours reached us that Daniel's consistent play so far attracted the attention of not only one but two Franchises in the VHLM. As this is still a unfolding stories, the respective franchises need to be unnamed for the time being.

 

 

 

 

Edited September 11, 2021 by Daniel Janser

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REVIEW

 

I liked the style with which you wrote this! It really does feel like a report that could've been written in a sports paper following your player's and his team's career.

However I felt like the part with the games recap is a bit disjointed from the first part and the ending. For next time maybe try and make the whole thing flow a little bit smoother?

Overall I liked it. Good job on the article and good luck with your career!

7.5/10

[osens 297]

Good article, I liked that you included a lot of statistics in here. I would recommend make the text feel more like actual media by reducing the spaces. It would make for an easier reading and also include some pictures. I liked that you made like entire newspaper for the story, it adds more realism. Great work, hope to see more of this!

 

8/10