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[Da Trifecta 1,902]

Dat Offseason Swag

 

Davey Jones has decided to throw an offseason party for all of his teammates and some of his closest friends. He wants to fly everyone to Disney World in Orlando, Florida. He sent out the invitations the following day after the Express had lost to the Titans in the playoffs. He made sure that everyone had his number which he put in the invitations for everyone to contact him if they couldn't make it. He also sent out emails for some people who might have been too busy to use the phone and also just in case the ones sent in the mail didn't get there in time.

 

 

There were a few people who couldn't make it due to their own reasons and Davey understood. He told them that he plans to do this again next year and that they will definitely be on the invite list again the following year. Some of the names that will headline this are, Thomas Landry, Lennox Moher, Gregory Glass, Cody Inko, Ethan Osbourne and Kameron Taylor. Everyone was excited for the chance to all go to Disney and party it up. They all wanted to make sure that they were enjoying their offseason and they were going to be there for 7 days to enjoy the full features the park has to offer.

 

When the plane landed the group of guys went to the car rental place to find a couple cars for them to travel around the area in case they needed to go somewhere or get something. After getting their cars, they went to the hotel to drop off their luggage and to change their clothes into something a little more warmer. The weather is predicted to be all in the 90's throughout the week and everybody wanted to be prepared so they all packed shorts and muscle shirts. They also talked it over and one night they wanted to take a drive out to Daytona Beach and actually enjoy some swimming and surfing.

 

 

Everyone had to go shopping because they all wanted a few new pairs of swimming shorts and a couple players went and bought surf boards to go surfing with. Davey, Lennox and Greg all went to look for surfboards while the other guys all went looking for swimming shorts. They went to different areas because the surfboards were located at a custom shop that only sold surfboards. Davey told everyone that he would pay for their surfboards as part of the package. When it was all said and done, Davey would go on to spend about $750 on 3 surfboards for the guys. He had no problem with this because it was him who invited everyone on this vacation in the first place. They all headed back to the hotel and they ended up making it back before the other guys and decided they were going to head out to the park. Davey sent a text to Kameron and told him they were headed to the park and to meet them there.

Edited December 18, 2013 by Da Trifecta

[eaglesfan036 4,605]

Disney World!

[Ball 453]

Content: 3/3- I'm debating giving you a zero because I never got an invite and Disney Land is the most magical place on earth. Very well written and its nice to see you invited some of the other players from the teams you vs in the playoffs.

 

Grammar: 2/2- Just a run on sentence or two but otherwise only found one mistake

little more warmer = little warmer (sounds weird when you add more)

 

Appearance: 1/1- Yessir 

 

Overall: 6/6

[Fire Tortorella 2,653]

Content: 3/3 - I'm upset I didn't get an invite either. Disney World is one of the best vacation spots in the U.S., regardless of your age. At least some members of the VHL got to have some fun their during the off-season.

 

Grammar: 2/2 - Just one more.

 

offseason = off-season (x2)

 

Appearance: 1/1 - Disney!

 

Overall: 6/6

 

FINAL: 6/6

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