Rookie Profile: Erik Draven [2/2] (633 WORDS)

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Erik Draven 

After successfully avenging his murdered fiance Shelly in a film that became a total reality. Erik becomes bored with being just a fictional undead character. He decides to follow the Crow to St.Louis Missouri and spectates action-packed playoff game of St.Lous Blues hockey. The Blues were pounding the Boston Bruins in Game 4 and delivered no stop action and ended with an all-important victory. Since that day Erik believed he was destined to play this fast and physical contact sport that seemed like all-out war. So he after the game he runs into a drunk ex-Blue named Bret Hull. Completely starstruck by Erik Draven and being an apparent huge fan of The Crow film he takes him to the locker room and gets him some gear. Erik had asked for a Blues jersey and Hull being totally wasted just gave him all the gear he needed to get started. He also gave him a list of agents to contact to try out for a minor league team as a walk-on. From that day on Erik dedicated his immortality to hockey. At age 21 he signs with the Yukon Rush in the VHLM league. He is a big tall 6 ft 4" 200lb right winger that is still experimenting and adjusting to playing in  the new league. Erik has committed himself to play a hard and fast game with a relentless forecheck that creates turnovers and chances for himself and his teammates. He likes to play in the dirty areas like in the corners cycling the puck and likes to screen the goalie by standing in front of the net. His ability to score on deflections and put rebounds in quickly makes him very valuable to any team he will play for. But his trademark goal would be scoring on one-timers. Dravens snapshot is his most powerful weapon and is considered highly accurate. When presented with 2 on 1 opportunity he almost never misses a chance to score.           

Strengths

Enhanced Strength & Combat : 

Because of his otherworldly strength, Erik is able to overcome an adversary with ease. He can sometimes knock an opponent unconscious with one strike. Draven's strength increases the more he thinks about the ones he loves. With his enhanced strength and combat skills, he is able to intimidate just by reputation. Most players will not even attempt to even start a fight or land a big hit on Erik. Therefore just by having him in the lineup and on the ice can give his team the advantage and intimidate the opponent with his fast and hard style. His love for the game provides even more strength to his game.   

Superhuman acute senses:

His ability to see across long distances gives him an advantage with avoiding opponents defensive tactics. Therefore brings him better hockey sense. Erik has a remarkable vision and can see the ice like no other player in the league. He has the ability to make difficult plays seem easy. His adjustment to defensive pressure is well noticed and can open up even more offensive opportunities.

Advanced regenerative healing factor:

When injured Erik heals almost instantly

Enhanced speed and reflexes: 

The reborn has increased speed and cat-like reflexes. Which will help his elusiveness and skill

Team Player

Given his love and understanding of the game, Erik strives to stay focused on being a team player and working together to win games. His ultimate goal is to win a Championship and honor his late fiance Shelly.

 

Weakness

Self-harm:

If Erik were to harm himself he would not be able to heal from the wounds.

Death or injury to the magical Crow: 

If the Crow is injured or dies this will leave Erik Draven susceptible to damage or injury.   

 

 

Edited June 17, 2019 by Jbeezy76
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Review:

 

It can't rain all the time.

 

To be honest, the summary info is more in the style of a biography, would be better suited there. This is supposed to be an amateur scouting report. Glad you're having fun with it all.

 

Your grammar skips between tenses at times, keep an eye on that.

 

How do these strengths and weaknesses apply to hockey? It's all good to have flavour, but they have to have examples about how they translate into the game.

 

On 6/6/2019 at 12:17 PM, Jbeezy76 said:

His ability to see across long distances gives him an advantage with avoiding opponents defensive tactics.

Long distances like 200 ft?

 

I get what you're trying to do here, but the execution is a little sloppy. You've put a stick in The Crow's hands without giving it much purpose or explanation.