Leduc First game « brake down »

[Lemorse7 1,023]

Before Leduc first VHLM game, he was sitting in the arena doing is usual routine preparing himself to play. AC/DC welcome to jungle blasting trough is ear he take a moment to look around the arena and saw all the banners and remember what is GM just said to him a little earlier : You’re are here because we have fate in you to help this team win a other cup. With the legacy of the Yukon Rush Leduc was ready to hit the ice and prove to the other GM that they made a mistake not choosing him.
 

The first period begin Leduc first shift was a bit, you can say a wake up call, trying to steal the puck from a other team  player and hook him in front of the referee, who was already calling the penalty Leduc frustrating on himself was looking down in the Penalty box. He realize that he needed to be more cautious about what plays he will made. The First period ended and the score was tied 3 for both team. Leduc was siting in the locker room focus for the second period. His coach was looking around the locker room staring into every player’s eyes, he stop right at Leduc place, Leduc look up and said : I know coach it was a bad penalty and I’m going to make it work on the second period trust me. The coach was a bit surprise by the kid and said nothing, he just glance at him nodding is head and continue his road around the locker room.  
 
 

Leduc First shift in the second period, he enter the ice, skating like he shotgun ten energy drink. He hit a player in the neutral zone, take the puck, enter the enemy zone skating a bit looking around, he saw his teammates Bot D5 behind him but the other team player was blocking the pass, so he shoot and the goalkeeper make the pad save but Bot D5 take the juicy rebound and score!! The second shift in this period Delaney Monroe with the puck in the offensive zone, Leduc was in front of the goalkeeper trying to block his view when Monroe hit the puck with a powerful slap shot Leduc had just enough time to redirected the shot in the top left corner to score his first goal of his career. To help the Yukon Rush take the lead 5 to 3. The Yukon win this game 6 to 4 against Saskatoon. In the third, Leduc did take an other stupid penalty finishing the game with one goal, one assists, two hits, four shots, four penalty minutes and he play a total of 10 minutes and 36 seconds in his first game. 
 

Leduc want it to talk to the coach about the games and his relations with the team he explain to the coach how he needed to take a brake for a while, because is grandfather was at the hospital and he was not in is 100% shape with his head he was not able to focus on hockey. That why he was tense between period he explain to the coach. The coach understand his situation and offer him to pay his flight ticket to go home for a week or two.
 

 

Our favorite protagonist did not play in game 2 to 5 but will be back for game 6. Thank you for reading and hope you appreciate it. 
 

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claiming this the week ending 10/10/21 

[Masu Chan 458]

I like the idea of this it's very creative and I think you told a pretty interesting story, Great Job! There's a few spelling errors which is always bound to happen especially in a longer article, I recommend writing out your media spots in a Google Doc or with Grammerly to catch the spelling errors as they happen. I'm in no way a great writer myself, but I find those help me.

[nurx 914]

I love hearing the story of how Leduc handles gameday, but it might be helpful to do was Masu Chan said and run your media spot through Google Docs with Grammarly. Grammarly is free on the chrome store and it really helps improve writing. 8/10

[Lemorse7 1,023]

6 hours ago, Masu Chan said:

I like the idea of this it's very creative and I think you told a pretty interesting story, Great Job! There's a few spelling errors which is always bound to happen especially in a longer article, I recommend writing out your media spots in a Google Doc or with Grammerly to catch the spelling errors as they happen. I'm in no way a great writer myself, but I find those help me.

Is it available on IOS cause I don’t have a pc or computer 

[Masu Chan 458]

Unfortunately I have no clue. I use Google Docs on my Android phone usually. It has a built in spell check and an option to double check. I'm sure if you can't use it on your IOS there may be a free app. Either way I really enjoyed your media spot!

[ROOKIE745 608]

review time: Honestly what you were going for here is great, and I love this type of stories/posts it's just bogged down by plenty of spelling errors, to many to ignore (though I did see you are writing this on IOS so I understand the struggle). Still if you can next time give it a extra read through and make any corrections you can. I admire the effort and you don't see many like this, that take it from from the players point of view and what's going through his mind. I'll give it a 7/10 because I understand where your coming from with the typing and believe it wouldn't be a problem if you were on a laptop or something.