Ramicus 147 Posted November 25, 2014 Share Posted November 25, 2014 Skates on the Ground: Love to Fight or A Good Man George “The General” Patton, who was actually a reborn version of General George Patton of the Third Army, was not happy. He was not a young man born in Germany. He was not the boy who had played hockey for so many years to prepare for a career full of glory. He was a general from so many years ago, dead in a car crash not far from where he had once thought he had been born. No, he was actually Ol’ Blood and Guts, brought back from the dead by Nazi scientists as part of Operation Paperclip. He was a product of the computer brain of Emile Zola. He was American, not German. He was a war hero, not a hockey player. In fact, he was a really great general instead of a mediocre hockey player. He was very much not happy, though. He did not appreciate finding out that he was over one hundred years old. He did not appreciate finding out that he was alive only because of doctors affiliated with the National Socialist German Workers' Party, a horrible organization responsible for millions of deaths, and HYDRA, a previously fictional organization. It was still game time, though, and The General was still a hockey player. He was a hockey player with some serious anger, and he intended to take it out on someone. Perhaps it would be more appropriate to say a whole lot of someones, because there are six men a team on the ice at a time, and five that he could hit. So he did just that. He hit the ice (figuratively) and took down the first opponent he saw. Then he hit another. Then another. Then another. Then one more, you know, for good luck. The General liked this beating people up thing. He was about to take down the first guy again when Fedir Okranitz, star goalie who couldn’t manage to carry them into the playoffs, skated up. The Ukrainian yelled in his ear. “You don’t have to do this!” “But Fed! I love to fight!” “You’re a good man!” “What the hell am I supposed to do!?” “Fight the good fight!” The General had a thought. He liked his new thought. He gave his friend Fedir Okranitz a hug and went to beat up another hockey player. The time would come soon enough for George Patton to fight the good fight. When the game, and therefore the season, came to an end, it was time for him to do just what the goalie had said. It was time for The General to fight the good fight. He boarded a plane, and off he went to… Come back next week for… J’ACCUSE! or SHOTS YOU TAKE Jamie and eaglesfan036 2 Link to comment https://vhlforum.com/topic/14674-claimedskates-on-the-ground-part-iii/ Share on other sites More sharing options...
eaglesfan036 4,603 Posted November 25, 2014 Share Posted November 25, 2014 nice work once again :3 ur sig isreally cool too Link to comment https://vhlforum.com/topic/14674-claimedskates-on-the-ground-part-iii/#findComment-153053 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Da Trifecta 1,899 Posted November 29, 2014 Share Posted November 29, 2014 Content: 2.5/3 It was on the short side a little here. Interesting to read about Fedir Okranitz being a good friend of Patton's. Patton will set out to prove his worth soon. Grammar: 2/2 Nothing noticeable Appearance: 1/1 Grade: 5.5/6 Link to comment https://vhlforum.com/topic/14674-claimedskates-on-the-ground-part-iii/#findComment-154366 Share on other sites More sharing options...
Senior Admin Will 4,660 Posted November 29, 2014 Senior Admin Share Posted November 29, 2014 Content: 3/3 Was over the minimum word count so frankly I don't see a reason for any deduction here. These articles are definitely..interesting. Looking forward to the next edition and seeing where the fuck Patton ends up. Grammar: 2/2 six men a team = six men per team Appearance: 0.5/1 Honestly the appearance of this makes it somewhat hard to read. With the giant pictures and lack of whitespace, it's too crowded and overall bothersome. Maybe just try some smaller images and break up paragraphs a little better. Overall: 5.5/6 Final: 6/6 Link to comment https://vhlforum.com/topic/14674-claimedskates-on-the-ground-part-iii/#findComment-154534 Share on other sites More sharing options...
James 77 Posted December 1, 2014 Share Posted December 1, 2014 Claimed Link to comment https://vhlforum.com/topic/14674-claimedskates-on-the-ground-part-iii/#findComment-155686 Share on other sites More sharing options...
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