Komarov returns to the gym [FINAL 5/6]

[Gooningitup 1,290]

Russian defender new kid gives new motivation

 

Defensive defender Komarov has found his drive again, the defender is primed and ready to become Davos number 1 defender. Komarov who came to Davos highly touted, earned a reputation from being a hard nosed, defensive defender. The Rock as he is called by fans never plays a flashy game and many scouts often refereed to his junior days as the invisible man. Most people would hear he is invisible on the ice and take it as a bad thing, however for a defensive defender that is exactly what you want. The kid showed flashes of being a franchise shut down defender, hes back now and more driven than ever to become the next great defensive defender.

 

 

This is great news fro Davos fans as many were feeling it may be time to look elsewhere, or see what they could get for him well his value was still high. The defender had a great rookie season, finishing 3rd on the team in scoring, 1st in hits, 3rd in shots blocked. Davos struggled and well Komarov knows he wont be winning any major awards or rookie of the year hes happy with his first year. Komarov stated however that he plans on taking his game to a whole new level next season. He has been seen shooting the puck more in practice, leading many to speculate hes adding a bit more of an offensive game to his tool set. Komarov stated he was in fact looking to add a bit more offensive game but was not going to stray from the game that he plays best.

 

 

Davos struggled last year knowing it would be a year of building, however this season is a different story the expectations are high. The rookies have a year under there belts, the draftees will join the team, and they added some veteran help to teach the kids. That makes some wonder who is going to play top pairing next year alongside veteran Zadorov. Many believe Komarov has the inside edge, but with both being similar developed its not so easy and may boil down to chemistry.  Davos will be pushing hard for the playoffs this season, and next year they have cup aspirations. This team has a dedicated group of rookies who want to turn this team into one of the greatest dynasties of this VHL era.

 

 

Fans are certianly excited to see what this young team can do especially if they can keep together and continue to grow at a steady pace like they have so far. Komarov has the drive with a new born kid to make his son proud. He also wants to let Davos fans know their GM didst make the wrong call when they made him there first pick in S40. He has set the bar high for S42 he wants to take the next step in becoming an impact defender in this league. He wants to go down as the best defensive defender the VHL has ever seen.

 

Look forward to seeing what Shock, Hunter, Rubin, Komarov, as well as the other young players on this team can do this year. Davos will be a team to follow this season and they could turn a few heads this season.

 

 

[DollarAndADream 3,356]

Content: 3/3 - Good article. I'm excited to watch your player grow.

Grammar: 1.5/2 - Quite a few mistakes, so I have to dock a little bit.

 

"his drive again, the defender is primed and ready to become Davos number 1 defender." - drive again, and the defender is primed and ready to become Davos' number one defender. Missing an apostrophe on Davos and an 'and' after the comma. The number should be spelled out as well.

"Komarov who came to Davos" - Komarov, who came to Davos.... - missing a comma.

"The Rock as he is called by fans never plays a flashy game and many scouts often refereed to his junior days" - The Rock, as he is called by fans, never plays a flashy game.......REFERRED to HIM IN his junior days. Missing a couple of commas, spelled referred wrong, and another thing.

"hes back now" - he's

"great news fro Davos fans as many were feeling it may be time to look elsewhere, or see what they could get for him well his value was still high" - FOR Davos fans, .......... or see what they could get for him WHILE his value was still high. A couple of typos and a missing comma.

"1st in hits, 3rd in shots blocked." - AND 3rd in shots blocked.

"Davos struggled and well Komarov knows he wont be winning any major awards or rookie of the year hes happy with his first year." - WHILE instead of well, and HE'S instead of hes. 'He's' needs an apostrophe because it's a shortening of HE IS.

"add a bit more offensive game" - a bit more TO HIS offensive game.

"this season is a different story the expectations are high." - this season is a different story AS the expectations are high.

"The rookies have a year under there belts" - under THEIR belts.

"its not so easy" - it's not so easy. Missing an apostrophe.

"certianly excited to see what this young team can do especially" - certAINly excited to see what this young team can do, especially..... - typo on 'certainly', and missing a comma.

"their GM didst make the wrong call when they made him there first pick in S40." - didn't. their. Typo on 'didn't', and incorrect use of 'there'.

"He has set the bar high for S42 he wants" - S42, he wants.

Appearance: 1/1 - Everything is good appearance-wise.

Overall: 5.5/6

[CowboyinAmerica 2,889]

Content: 3/3 - Excellent read, and glad to see you back! As long as you and everyone else on Davos stays active, could be a big year for the team.

 

Grammar: 1/2 - I'm sorry, but going to have to take a bit more off here than my other grader for that number of easily-catchable mistakes in just over 500 words. If possible, I would suggest running your articles through some sort of spell checker before submitting it here. If the computer you're using doesn't have Microsoft Word or some sort of similar program, then using Google Docs is free and takes about 2 minutes. Given the amount of time it takes to write a normal article, I think it would be worth it.

 

Presentation: 1/1 - Pictures and the title do it for me.

 

Total: 5/6, Average: 5.25/6

 

Final: 5/6