linsangeles 59 Posted September 26, 2015 Share Posted September 26, 2015 (edited) ENTRANCE TO THE VHLM I would say, this is most interesting stories of proffesional hockey player carrer starting I ever heard. As you can see, he is from Europe - Belgium, and born in beatiful city - Mons. His father is Latvian, so he know a latvian language a bit as well. Of course, Belgium is not a hockey nation, for that reason Gregory started play basketball at age 4. He is not a smallest guy, but thats not enough for playing bball. He doesn`t gave up till age 8, and then his coach one day, saw that he is a good skater, and he give an advice - Why not to try hockey? In following week, he is on skates at his first training. He had a choice. He choose to play for Belgium national team, because at first, he wasn`t so good, to get in junior Latvian NT. He doesn`t like a hockey at first, because there was much more physical game, but then he got an experience in Belgium, get bigger and stronger, and he is ready for debut in VLHM! STRENGHTS! In basketball he was a athletic point guard, so he is minded for a playmaker in hockey too. He likes to passing much than shoot himself. He has got a great game vision, so reaction is good. That`s is need for good playmakers, like Datsyuk, Sedin. Needs to get trust in him, to show best he can actually do! Fallum is so big - 96kgs, so he is hard working, unstoppable and do not give up, if whatever happens. He has got smooth athletic power, so he`s not as clumsy as looks like. Not a fastest skater, but got a good stamina on skates, so endurance is high level rest of game. Very hard to steal the puck, so he is like a fish in water with the puck. He is puchandling like a god. Episodically Gregory can show some nice deking ability. To sum up, he is universal center, could win faceoffs, could play on a wing. He could be a captain, when he get older. Not a naturally power forward, but isn`t afraid at agressive hockey. NEED TO IMPROVE! In junior league he has worked out much on playing without puck, so that is a problem for him. He usually can`t get on wide open position, so teammates can`t pass to him. He needs to be with same players to keep up line chemistry, that could help with that. Another thing that i would "underline" is puck reiceving. When the puck is bouncing, for some reasons(bad ice quality) he got a mistakes with that. Sometimes his body can`t do that brain does. He needs to get more explosion on his accelatrion. Usually needs to get much time to get the max speed. SO LETS SEE HOW THINGS TURN AROUND WITH HIM IN VHLM! GOOD LUCK IN HIS DEBUT! Edited September 30, 2015 by Gregy eaglesfan036 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phil 5,119 Posted September 26, 2015 Share Posted September 26, 2015 looking forward to reading it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
linsangeles 59 Posted September 26, 2015 Author Share Posted September 26, 2015 Finished it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eaglesfan036 4,598 Posted September 26, 2015 Share Posted September 26, 2015 good stuff, I like the graphic thingy you put at the top Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
linsangeles 59 Posted September 29, 2015 Author Share Posted September 29, 2015 Mby could someone grade? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phil 5,119 Posted September 30, 2015 Share Posted September 30, 2015 Mby could someone grade? Quick! Correct the spelling to the "Strengths" Heading! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DollarAndADream 3,356 Posted October 4, 2015 Share Posted October 4, 2015 Overview: 1.75/2 - Needs to be at least 500 words. This isn't quite there, at 481. Pros & Cons: 2.5/3 - Pros & cons are solid, but this section needs to be at least 350-400 words. This is only around 300. Grammar: 1/2 - This section is one that I don't like. I suggest that you get one of your teammates, or even myself to proofread your articles before you submit them. There's a lot of mistakes in here, maybe even one every sentence or two. I don't feel like I should list them all because it is a lot. Spelling mistakes, punctuation mistakes, etc. It's all there. It's all still comprehensible though so I won't deduct a ton. "I would say, this is most interesting stories of proffesional hockey player carrer starting I ever heard. " - this is the most interesting story of a professional hockey player's career that I have ever heard. "beatiful" - beautiful "so he know a latvian language" - so he knows a Latvian language "Gregory started play basketball at age 4" - playing "He is not a smallest guy, but thats not enough for playing bball." - not the smallest / that's Presentation: 1/1 - Good. Overall: 6.25/8 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tylar 219 Posted October 4, 2015 Share Posted October 4, 2015 Overview: 1.75/2 - Wasn't 500 words. Like DAAD mentioned. Pros & Cons: 2.5/3 - Like DAAD good pro's and cons, just didn't hit the word count. Grammar: 1/2 - There was a lot. Don't think its necessary to point out any more like other grade suggested. I would take DAAD's suggestion of getting someone to proof read it (Even PM me considering i'm your GM for the time being) (or proof read it on MSWord or on a online thing). There was just too much. Presentation: 1/1 - The graphic at the top is pretty neat. I like it! Overall: 6/8 (6.25 Rounds to 6) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CowboyinAmerica 2,887 Posted October 12, 2015 Share Posted October 12, 2015 Claimed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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