Jordan Tonn Biography [2/2]

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His Father

Joshua Tonn played in the NHL as Tampa Bay Lightings number one winger! He won the cup 2 times with Tampa but in 2003 he had to move on due to concussion reasons. During his time in the NHL, he learned a lot. He then went on to coach Tampa in 2 years after taking a short break from hockey. He then lead Tampa to 3 cups in a row! But now it was time for him to focus on his son. Jordan Tonn. He wanted to make him a star and would do everything he could to make that happen. But right after Jordan was Drafted to the Las Vegas Aces he was hit by a car. Honestly, Jordan did not really know what to do. He had just been drafted and was having a great start to his career. But now his dad passes away from a tragic death. Now before every game, Jordan takes some time while on the ice in the warmup to remember his dad and to give thanks to him and all he did and when Jordan's banner gets raised towards heaven his dad will be proud. 

 

Jordan's School Life

Starting off Jordan was not a bad child. He would fool around in class and get a little distracted in class. But overall Jordan had good grades and did fairly well in school. In grade 4 he was on the volleyball team. Just in grade 4, Jordan was already 6 feet tall. So you could imagine how intimidating he looked. No one ever wanted to get him mad. His Volleyball Team went on to win the BC Provincials. On average Jordan had 12 blocks a game! The man could not be stopped. But you know he just was not feeling Volleyball anymore so after many night thinking about what he wanted to do he moved on. What did he move onto you might ask? Well, he moved to Basketball another sport that his family loved to play! Jordan was super tall, but to be honest that did not really help him. Jordan struggled to shoot and to dribble. He would often be pushed around. How I don't know. But he could not ever get a good rhythm going and start putting up points. Jordan was not used to that. In Volleyball everything was to easy not he moved on and nothing is working out. Jordan was done with that sport. So he decided to move on once again. This time to something you can kick. Yes. A soccer ball. Jordan felt that with his speed he could not be stopped.

 

Jordan's Family and Sports

As soon as Jordan could walk, he was on the move, always active playing all types of different sports. Jordan had 2 brothers.  As you can imagine this created quite the competitive background in the family. They did not always get along very well. It was a constant competition for everything between them.  They really took a liking to soccer and played as much as they could through their grade school years. When they were in grade 9 Jordan out of all of them was made the captain of their grade soccer team. Jordan was super excited so he went out there and put out his best effort. As you could imagine his brothers were not too happy they weren't the captain. But things still seemed to work out as they had incredible chemistry together. They went on to grade 10 not losing any games but Jordan felt it was time to move on. So he switched to hockey and so did his brothers. They always wanted to be the best so they all switched.

 

As the years passed Jordan was becoming something special. His brothers worked day in and day out but just could not reach his skill. He went on to be drafted and got put with the defending cup champs! Jordan could not have been happier. But then his father passed away. Jordan decided it was best to take 1 day off and reflect then move on. His brothers are currently working hard to get drafted and trying to be the next star. Just when Jordan's life was looking up. His mom was in the crossfire between a gang and was shot. Jordan rushed to the hospital to go see his mom one last time before it was just his brother and him. But maybe it was not the last time he would see her! The doctors healed her! Jordan was so excited he did not know what to say. He took her home the next day and promised that he would make his family the number 1 priority in life. about 2 weeks later while it was finally time to start the season Jordan was getting a little bit discouraged. In 3 games he had 0 points and was playing an average of 6.98 minutes a game. But his coach Jubo had some words for him. Don't be discouraged, use this as motivation and so he did. He went out and started to practice more often and work harder then he had ever done in his life. His mom was in need of him so he has to get points on the board and start giving his family and his fans a moment to remember. On Friday, March 1st Jordan had a meeting with Jubo. We are in need of a second line center. This would be a way to lock down a second line spot. Work hard in faceoffs for the next few weeks and you will have a very good chance of being out 2nd line center this season. This was the solution. I wanted more minutes so he gave me a chance to get those minutes. Not to take them. But to earn them. You would also get Powerplay Minutes so work hard on your positioning. So it was set he was going to work for that second line spot.  

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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[FrostBeard 2,049]

Review - quite an interesting story of young lad that used his families support to push himself to the next level and make his dad proud. One of the things I am quite fond of it that author separated each part of our hero's life into a different paragraph with a title as that allows us to understand the flow of his progression to become an VHLer. Maybe a title on top could have made it pop a bit more. 7/10

[TheFlash 317]

Overall not bad. I liked the back story, of him trying out lots of other sports. Your sentences were structured a bit odd at times but that's okay, it happens. Definitely needs some photos, they just help to add some colour and make it not look like one big wall of text. Again, good to see you go away from the hockey angle like many do and talk a bit more about life!