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I´m sure some of you know that , I absolutely hate doing anything at night time.  I don´t know what it is but the darkness makes me feel like a little girl. It feels like someone is watching me and just waiting that I make a mistake or let my guard down.  Luckily I don´t have to usually do anything at night time since we pretty much go straight to the hotel after games.  The big problem starts when we have a home game and after everything is done , we can just go to home and usually that happens when it´s dark outside. 
Well this whole thing started when I was just doing my thing and going home after tough home game.  It was raining but I drove home so I did not get wet. I ran inside and when I was behind my front door, I could clearly hear someone talking inside my place! I knew nobody should not be there so I slowly opened the door and searched the place. Nothing , absolutely nothing. Nobody was in there. I did not leave the TV on or anything. The voices clearly came from my place.   
 
I of course freaked out and went straight into a hotel for that night. I can´t sleep in a place that might be haunted.  
 
Next morning I called a expert and he said that my place might be haunted. I just bought it and this was the first time I heard any voices. This could also mean I´m going crazy but I did not want to take any chances. I sold the place two weeks later.  Since I´m a nice guy,  I did not tell the new owners that the place might be haunted. I gave the new owners most of my furniture and clothes. Who knows, maybe the ghosts live in my furniture? Not willing to risk that. I only took my suit and shoes with me. I gave them nice little discount on the prize which should make up for it. There is no point in making all of us scrared
 
All this gave me a valuable lesson. I need to get in touch with my spiritual side. Maybe all this just means that I need to let my body and soul heal? No idea what it means but I started to take yoga classes soon after. I don´t want to start bragging but I´m clearly the best in my class. Most of the people in my yoga class are really old but still , If you would see me there, you would be amazed.
I´m that flexible. eZBDICO.png
 
I noticed that I´m also more agile on the ice. I just hope the ghosts leave me alone from now on. I hate them so much. You can´t even see them most of the time.  Some of you might think that ghosts are not even real. What were those voices in my place then ? Ghosts , bro , ghosts. 
 
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Content 3/3 - I personally found this very far stretched and lacks flow.

Grammar 1.75/2 - some easy things to fix.

that I make = for me to make

have to usually = usually

go to home = go home

should not be there = should be there (no double negatives)

a expert = an expert

Appearance 1/1 - sure

Content 3/3 Interesting article

 

Grammar 1.75/2 Some mistakes Taron got most of them

 

scrared - scared 

 

Theres also lots of random  spaces but that could just be the formatting 

 

Appearance 1/1 Looks fine

 

Overall 5.75/6

 

Final 6/6

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