Nathan MacKinnon FINALLY meets his favorite team, the Colorado Avalanche [1/2]

[bagelbitesisbae 71]

Myself, Nathan MacKinnon, won a contest to see my favorite team, the Colorado Avalanche. I was in my room and an advertisement popped up about a contest that you could enter into and win a chance to go see the Colorado Avalanche. The contest was about writing about your experiences playing in the amateur leagues. I obviously had to enter into the contest. I wrote about my experiences about playing on the Halifax Mooseheads in the QMJHL. I got an email back from them, and they said I had won a contest. Plane tickets to Colorado weren't provided so I had to ask my parents if they would pay for my plane ride. They happily agreed and I flew to Denver. I got to my hotel room and went to bed. The next day, I drove over to Pepsi Center. I was very anxious about meeting the players. I walked in and showed the front desk person that I had won the contest. She told me to follow her to where the players were. I walked into a room and right there, Mikko Rantanen was standing right there. Rantanen was really tall! He introduced himself like I didn't know who he was, lol! I told him I was a huge fan of him and asked him if he would sign the jersey I brought. Rantanen gladly said that he'd sign the jersey I brought. I was very excited if you didn't already know. The person who escorted me to Rantanen said that Nathan MacKinnon was waiting for me in another room. I walked with the front desk person and they took me to Nathan MacKinnon. I was really anxious about meeting Nathan MacKinnon because we both have the same name and we played on the same amateur team. When we finally made it to the room, I sat down on a bench next to MacKinnon and we chatted about his experiences playing in the NHL. We talked for a while and then I finally asked him for a signature. He gave me his signature and then I told him that Rantanen signed it as well. MacKinnon said that he and Mikko were very good friends and did a lot of stuff together. The lady then escorted me out of the room and said that our final destination was to meet the head coach, Jared Bednar. I was really excited to meet Jared because he was recently a nominee for the Jack Adams award. The Jack Adams award signifies that you were one of the best coaches in the NHL. I walked into the room and sat down next to Bednar. I told him where I had played and that my name was Nathan MacKinnon. He was like, oh, our star play is named Nathan MacKinnon. I got kind of embarrassed, but at the same time, I was just in awe. After we were done talking , I asked if he would sign my jersey. He didn’t just sign my jersey, but he gave me a personal message as well. After meeting 3 people, I went back to my room and flew back the next day. My experience was so much fun to be apart of!

[BluObieZ 1,125]

When I read this I cannot help but picture this as a "what did you do for summer" assignment in elementary school. Not saying you are that young. Just saying it reads like that. Avs are my fave team.

Edited August 20, 2018 by BluObieZ

[bagelbitesisbae 71]

16 hours ago, BluObieZ said:

When I read this I cannot help but picture this as a "what did you do for summer" assignment in elementary school. Not saying you are that young. Just saying it reads like that. Avs are my fave team.

Yeah, I didn't try too hard on it so it might've sounded childish. I have other pieces of writing you can check out.

[DollarAndADream 3,356]

Review:

Big block of text, so that's a negative from me. Would help to separate into a couple of paragraphics, add a title at the top, etc but it's a fine read.

Good work, nonetheless.