Content: 3/3 - I like that you modeled your goalie after Brodeur, who is one of the few standup goalies left. I also like the background story where you talked about playing with the Mooseheads, which I think is the best hockey name ever. I wish you good luck in developing your goalie, and hopefully you have a career like Brodeur's.
Grammar: 2/2 - Flyers got all of it.
Presentation: 1/1 - Good.
Pros: 1.5/2 - Same as what Flyers said, you described your pros well but did not reach near 200.
Cons: 1.5/2 - Same as above.
Overall: 9/10
Final: 9/10