twillcox94

Content: 3/3 Good overview on how the Titans have performed this season. It could of used a bit less stats, it kind of made it a boring read. Grammar: 1.75/2 championship, and with some new faces 2nd place, just 3 and 7 points, and Czar Titan's goalie Kimmo Salo Don't need to capitalize face off offence have the Titans looking like the team --> offence, the Titans are looking like the team to beat in the European Conference. year, so it's Appearance: 1/1 Clean and organized with pictures and a title. Total: 5.75/6

Content: 3/3 Brief overview of Iginla's struggle this season. Not to different from the real Iginla's constant early season struggles in recent years. Grammar: 1.75/2 Can't be a new hometown. Huge run on sentence in the first paragraph that could of been split into two or three sentences. taken the spotlight in Calgary, and really made up for -- > doesn't need a comma Run on sentence at the start of the third paragraph. Wranglers team came into S41 of the VHL, not expecting to be playing --> doesn't need a comma Appearance: 1/1 Nothing to dock a mark off for. I would suggest to maybe centre the picture next time and use a different colour font, the one you had was kind of hard on the eyes. Total: 5.75/6 Overall: 5.5 - 5.75 = 6/6

Content: 3/3 Really creative article. Great read. Grammar: 2/2 Nothing much build --> built Well, he is a damn good one too. Franchise's youth Appearance: 1/1 Really organized and clean. Great pictures and format. Total: 6/6 Overall: 6/6

VHL; real life, real problems.

Content: 3/3 Fantastic overview of the VHLM so far this season. Really interesting read. Yukon is 2 bad. Grammar: 2/2 Nothing really at all. with all that offensive --> Offence to be a dark horse Appearance: 1/1 Really slick design. Total: 6/6 Overall: 6/6

Content: 3/3 Interesting article going over Komarov's recent struggles. Hopefully you can pick it up. Grammar: 1.5/2 Komarov knew his rookie season would be a tough one the defender didn't expect to light up the league, However he was expected to be a physical shot blocking machine. --> Komarov knew his rookie season would be a tough one; the defender didn't expect to light up the league ,however, he was expected to be a physical, shot blocking machine. Komarov has shown the shot blocking side, currently sitting at 20, but the physicality that made Komarov a force in the VHLM has just disappeared. - Still worded a bit off . Through 8 games Komarov has 7 hits far off from his usual pace many experts just blame the fact hes asked to do too much for a young Davos team, however Komarov is just baffled --> Missing some commas. I would of went ... Through 8 games, Komarov has 7 hits, which is far off from his usual pace. Many experts just place the blame on the fact that he's being asked to do too much for a young Davos team, however, Komarov is just baffled. " I expected us to struggle i didn't expect to score a whole ton but i mean this is just embarrassing my team expects more from me and i expect more of myself. " but I mean The rest of the article is well written, but mostly everything is missing commas. The general rule I go by for commas is to place them where you would pause when you are reading the sentence out loud. Appearance: 1/1 Paragraph form, pictures, title. Total: 5.5/6

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Content: 2.75/3 It was good for what it was, but it kind of felt way to simplified and boring. Could of added a bit more pop to the answers instead of just a couple of really simple answers. Grammar: 2/2 Just a few comma errors and a missing unit for weight. Almost dropped to 1.75, so try to clean it up a bit for next time. Harumpf is a 5'5", 250 lb, playmaking center Middelfart, Denmark As if that wasn't enough, he Oskars, it's been Appearance: .75/1 Organized neatly but could of used a picture. Total: 5.5/6

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Is Willcox the Missing Piece for a Saskatoon Playoff Run ? BRAMPTON- After letting it be known all off-season that he was happy to stay with Brampton, General Manager Terrence Fong decided to ship the winger to Saskatoon for a season forty-two first round pick. With Brampton in a rebuild season, Terrence Fong decided to reward Willcox with the chance to compete for the Founder's Cup with the Wild. The 6'4'' youngster will provide a big body up front for the Wild, and will be sure to bring a rough and rugged style of play. Willcox has spent a bulk of his off-season training improving his goal scoring ability, which is a key ingredient for success in the VHLM. " Willcox was a pleasure to have here in Brampton during his shorty stay. He has shown great promise, and I have no doubts he will greatly improve the Wild. With our lack of depth it just wasn't our year, and I wanted to give Willcox the chance to try for a cup in his final VHLM season. " - Blades' General Manager Terrence Fong " I am very excited to bring Willcox into the fold. We had lack of depth on the wing, and I think Willcox addresses that problem very nicely. He will bring a great two-way game, so he will play in many key situations on both offence and defence. I am also excited to see him evolve into a offensive threat this season. " Wild's General Manager Kendrick " I want to thank Brampton for the opportunity they gave me by bringing me over from Wales. I am very excited to compete with Saskatoon and try to bring a cup here. I was disappointed by my performance in last season's playoff series against Minot, and I want to erase that out of my memory by having a good showing this season. " - Travis Willcox

Content: 3/3 Always will give full marks for something outside the box. Refreshing to read. Grammar: 1.5/3 Again Firkley hit everything I noticed. Some of it is just a preference more than correction and would normally be a 1.75 if it was a bit longer of an article. Appearance: 1/1 A photo didn't show up for me but I would assume it is just on my end. Clean and easy to read. Total: 5.5/6 OVERALL: 5.5 - 5.5 = 6/6

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