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Content: 2/2 - Great read . Hopefully the playoff gods are in your favor. Grammar: 2/2. centerman ----> center man Appearance: 1/1- great job as always. I've now caught on that your favorite team is LA. Final 6/6

Content: 2/2 -Cool idea with the whole crime thing. 500 words. Grammar: 2/2 - Two minor mistakes. Just read over your article before you post it. Reading it to yourself you will catch a good chunk of the easy mistakes. If you got any information it´s about the group --> If you have any information about the group i ---> The "I" should always be capitalized when referring to yourself. Appearance: 1/1 - lmao love the picture at the top. Priceless. Good job on the color text and the layout. Final 6/6

With the VHL season 43 entry draft coming up, Pablo has some interest in where he wants to be drafted. The are so many great teams in the league, but not all teams have arms wide open for Pablo Escabar. There are three great teams that Pablo is very interested in playing for next season. Which ever of these three teams draft Pablo, He plans on being a strong dedicated player. As well as a franchise player. The three teams Pablo is interested in are as followed; 1) Seattle Bears One of the team's Pablo Escabar is most interested in playing for is the Seattle Bears. The Bears have a really great group of guys, and they are all very easy to get along with. Pablo's mentor Niklaus Mikaelson (Mr.Jones) is the starting goalie for the Bears as well as a great friend and he has been for years. A couple months ago Mr. Jones introduced Pablo Escabar to, the general manager of the Bears, Brady Stropko (Mr. Grumpy Bear). The minute Pablo met Bushito they hit it off immediately. A friendship was created. Pablo also would love to be paired up with the legendary Phil Villeneuve on the blue line. We will see on draft day if Seattle is interested in Pablo Escabar. 2) Calgary Wranglers The Calgary Wranglers have had their eyes on Pablo Escabar ever since Pablo appeared in the VHL. Eaglesfan036 has shown a lot of interest in having Pablo on his roster. Pablo and Eaglesfan036 talk almost on a daily basis and have a great friendship building up. Currently Calgary is rebuilding, so the only down fall is that they would not be looking for a championship for a couple of seasons. Pablo is not all about winning championships though. Pablo is in the VHL to have fun, play hockey, and meet great guys. These three things can definitely be conquered under the leadership of eaglesfan. A weird obsession Pablo has with Calgary is the colors. He feels he would look very sexy in a black and red jersey. We will see on draft day if Calgary stays interested in Pablo Escabar on draft day. 3) Stockholm Vikings Stockholm Vikings have recently finished getting out of a rebuild stage and are very hungry for a championship. Last season they scored a lot of great picks from the draft. The draftee's made them a very strong contender. This season they managed to make the playoffs over the Davos'. Pablo Escabar would really enjoy being on a team with Vogon Jeltz. Jeltz is a very skilled young individual. Stockholm's general manager is a very kind and caring person. Boubabi always puts his team and players above himself. He is always friendly and builds a friendship with every single player. The man of my dreams. ( bahahahahahah). We will see if Stockholm is interested in Pablo Escabar on draft day. Every Other Team If the listed teams above show no interest in Pablo Escabar on draft day. Well then Pablo would be happy playing for any team that would welcome him in with open arms. No matter where Pablo goes he strives to be a franchise player no matter what. Pablo Escabar and myself would like to thank you all for your time. We cant wait to see you all on draft day in the off season, it will be a very exciting day.

Content: 2/2 - Awesome job, 539 words. Grammar: 2/2 - Only one spelling mistake. Teammates---> Team-mates or team mates. Appearance: 1/1 - Lots of color, pictures look mint. Good job man. Final 6/6

3-2 Toronto

Ill be passing Francis York Morgan this week

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Pablo Escabar is putting up a strong fight in the tpe chase against team-mate Francis York Morgan ( Christmas ). Pablo joined the VHL ten days after Morgan. They are currently tied with 137 tpe each. The two are completing against each other for a draft spot in the upcoming S43 Draft. The friendly competition makes the league more enjoyable and makes you strive to get all your point tasks done every week. Between Morgan and myself it is even more rewarding because we are blue line mates. We are striving to surpass each other but we are strengthening our defence for the Ottawa Lynx as well in the process. The Season is coming to an end with only approx. two weeks real time left in the regular season the Ottawa Lynx have some work to do. They need to get them self's a great playoff spot . I am still very confident that the Lynx will be making the finals in the S42 playoff ( Knocks on word ). "Being in the VHL league now for almost two months have really enjoyed it and it has grown on me. I can see myself being around for a very long time. There are a great group of guys here in the league, but as where there is good there is a lot of kids here. " Mr.Escabar.

Content: 2/2- Hof in my books! great read man keep up the good work and stay here forever! I do not know what the league would be like if u were not around and never want to find out. Grammar: 2/2 - few but nothing worth taking away. offcial -----> official encyclopedia -------> encyclopaedia tremedous --------> tremendous Appearance: 1/1- Would have really loved to see a picture or two. The text in Blue was a little hard to read at first but my eyes did adjust. Final : 6/6

Content: 2/2- Great concept with the question and answer with the people on the site. Grammar 1.5/2- A lot of easy mistakes. phsyical -----> physical teammates -------> team-mates or team mates. teammates -------> team-mates or team mates. (again) ben -----> been european --------> European Appearance: 1/1- looks ok. There is no picture. i see there is suppose to be one but it does not work. Has a title so i did not take marks off here. Total: 5.5/6 Please wait for a second grade.

Content: 2/2- Very sad to be seeing Bobby Ricky go. Careful next time you only past the minimum word requirement by 15 words. Grammar: 2/2 - You done good kid. Appearance: 1/1- very good, one of the best I've seen tonight. Final 6/6

Content: 2/2- Very strong top 3 players for Bern. Good job with the article and hitting 613 words. Grammar: 2/2- I'll give the marks this time but next time just read over it when done. Doing this you will catch the easy mistakes. teammates -------> team mates or team-mates. totaling --------> totalling behing -----------> behind Appearance: 1/1- looks really good. A title and sub titles. Maybe throw some color in on your next article? Final: 6/6

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4-1 NY

Content: 2/2- Great read. You guys have a strong team. Unfortunately not as strong as Ottawa 660 words well over. Grammar: 2/2- Nothing worth taking marks. Appearance: 1/1- Looks great pictures for every player. Well organized. Colorful title. Final 6/6 Apologizes for grading so late.

Finally Being Noticed. To be in the big leagues. A lot of people look at it as a dream rather than a passion. For Ottawa Lynx's Pablo Escabar this is not the case. Pablo has been fighting in the minors for quiet a few years now. It has actually been so many years that we have lost track. At first Pablo was used as extra weight, or a tough guy if you would. When ever the big named stars of the team would get hit or even bullied it was Pablo's job to rough them up and make them want to never do it again. Pablo got incredibly good at it. Almost to good at it, to the point that he was getting too comfortable. Unfortunately in the minors when you get too comfortable the coaches and scouts tend to see it. They like to see the hard working and always hungry players that won't stop for anything. After a few years in the minors Pablo started to realize that his game needed to be stepped up a notch. Very soon, Pablo was the leading shot blocker in the league and had a missile of a shot. Players would literally jump out of the way of his shot because they were afraid of being hit by it. I truly do not blame them, that shot could rip your leg off. One of Pablo's strong assets on the ice is easily his awareness, he can set up plays from the point probably more than likely blind folded. Pablo's favourite thing to do is throw his giant body in front of the opposing team's net, blocking the goaltender's sight and pushing around their defenders. With the S43 Victory Hockey League draft coming up in a few weeks, scouts and general managers have definitely seen Pablo Escabar's magic on the ice. Some of the managers have got in touch with Pablo. Others have been in the shadows watching from the side. This will definitely be a draft for Pablo to remember for the rest of his life as he has been working his tail off. Currently Pablo is sitting in fourth in the standings, but is striving to be in third or maybe even second when the draft arrives. We managed to catch Pablo after a game on his way out of the arena and we asked him what his thoughts were about the draft. The answer we got was inspirational: The draft has so many different effects on people. It can be very nerve racking, or it can be very exciting. It can make you very happy or very sad. Most of all it can change your life forever. The draft decides where you take your life next. Where your new adventure begins and where your old one ends. Pablo Escabar's words touched a lot of people. They are still talking about them across all sports channels and stations worldwide. Pablo is super excited to find out where his journey will take him and who he will meet along the way. Although like all hockey players dreams, Pablo Escabar can't wait or even think about how the feeling will be when he lifts the Championship cup in the Victory Hockey League.

Content: 2/2- Very strong article. Your player will get out of the slump! Grammar: 2/2- Only thing I could see that bothers me is I like the numbers typed in letters rather than numbers. That just me though there fore no marks are taken away. Appearance: 1/1- Very colorful and a great picture! Final: 6/6 I apologize for the late grade!

Duddy with the hatty! thata boy!!

Content: 6/6 very funny guy! Grammar: 1.75/2 Looks like Dollar got it!! Appearance: 2/2 Looks great has a title, and great pictures. 5.75/6 Final 6/6

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Definitely not for long.

3-2 Red Wolves

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