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Content: 3/3 As the guys said above, this is clearly a mag caliber article. Well written, easy to read, and plenty interesting to keep a reader reading. I also really like how you lay out the stats in a way that actually makes them readable. Both series should be really interesting to watch. Despite playing on the Rush, I think I may actually be more excited to see how the Turku-Bern series goes. Like you said, the defensive squad in Turku could very well put a huge damper on the offensive squad in Bern. Grammar: 2/2 Didn't find anything. Appearance: 1/1 Looks fantastic. Really, really nice formatting. Overall: 6/6

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Content: 3/3 455 words. It sounds like Lindemann has had a very successful career despite people doubting him. Though, being the age he is, it is not surprising that he has burnt himself out. Congrats on all the success you have had with your player, and best of luck in his final season. Grammar: 2/2 Didn't find anything. Appearance: 1/1 With a picture and some color to differentiate your dialogue, you have enough for a 1 here. It does look somewhat boring, though. Overall: 6/6

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meh you have nothing to worry about, i done with all my doubles and shit so i have to gain tpe like a normal person now

From russsia with love

wow note to self never use that mic again i dont sound anything like i do on the TV!

Content: 3/3 731 words. This was a nice article. Glad to hear Travis Boychuck has been doing a lot of improvements this year. Turku is certainly going to be a team to be reckoned with this playoffs. Good luck to ya. Grammar: 2/2 been this season = been this season, Appearance: 1/1 Looks nice. Overall: 6/6

I care. As long as he slips me one of his painkillers. Otherwise, the flyers suck.

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Content: 5/5 Pretty solid profile here. Hopefully Hudson will surpass his father and become the star Backenbauer. You had a good amount of background information on Hudson's upbringing, and a solid summary of his hockey career up to this point. I felt the Pros and Cons could have used a little more, but they still highlighted Hudson's strengths and weaknesses fairly well. Let's hope he can keep that temper of his under control. Grammar: 1/1 seventeen year old = seventeen years old mother, Ellen Backenbauer = mother, Ellen Backenbauer, expect for in Canada, he = except for in Canada, where he Appearance: /1 Looks like you have enough here. Over 500 Words? 1/1 Yup. Overall 8/8

dammit now im never going to get drafted!!!!!!!!!!!!

Content: 3/3 524 words. It sounds like Linholm will really be a guy to watch this playoffs. Best of luck in the series. While this is a mediocre interview, I don't really like the fact that the first quote from Linholm seems to come out of nowhere. Grammar: 2/2 - Just some minor things here: third line minutes his first season = third line minutes in his first season season 37 = Season 37 VHLM playoffs = VHLM Playoffs tho = though Appearance: 1/1 Looks good. Only thing I would change is maybe add a title. Overall: 6/6 FINAl: 6/6

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A series of unfortunate events

Shattered City: The Halifax Explosion

Content: 3/3 644 words. It has definitely got to be tough for the New York Americans to have been so close to their playoff dreams only to have those dreams stomped on in their very last game. The devastating loss to Helsinki in Game 142 must have really had an impact on the organizations confidence. On the plus side, at least people still want their autographs. Grammar: 1.5/2 It's worth mentioning that in addition to what I listed below, I found quite a few areas that could have used a comma to improve readability and sentence structure. New York Americas = New York Americans Americans Season lost = Americans Season Lost team an fans = team and fans ready for on the longest cross country flights = ready for one of the longest cross country flights on a high note winning = on a high note, winning but game 338 say another tragic loss = but game 338 brought another tragic loss loss to Seattle players and management = loss to Seattle, players and management Appearance: 1/1 Looks good to me. Overall: /6

Context: 3/3 968 words. Really nice article here. I really liked the fact that you took the time to gather some stats about some the players that are sure to be key assets to their respective teams during the playoffs. Best of luck to you in Saskatoon, as well as your other personality in Turku. Grammar: 2/2 - Just some minor brain farts here: Saskatoon is in that transition phase = Saskatoon is in a transition phase they have to horses to score = they have the horses to score Appearance: 1/1 Looks great. Overall: 6/6 FINAL: 6/6

Content: 3/3 523 words. Congrats on the move to GM, it sure will be an interesting series if Bern and Yukon end up facing off for the cup. Best of luck to you (not) and you're new squad in the playoffs Grammar: 1.75/2 Didn't find anything other than what Flyers got. I do agree with him that, based on the word count, there was a couple to many not to dock. Appearance: 1/1 Good formatting and nice pictures. Looks good. Overall: 5.75/6 FINAL: 6/6

Context: 3/3 - This is a really nice series you have going here. Although I'm still fairly new, I find it really interesting to read about the VHL's history. Also, you have obviously put in the time/effort to do the necessary research to make your articles well informed. Grammar: 1.5/2 - Didn't find anything more than what Flyers found here. I think working on your comma use would really improve your writing. There were both instances where they should have been used and weren't, as well as places where they were misused. Appearance: .75/1 - Again, Flyers pretty much covered this one. Just need to be a bit more careful when you're doing formatting. Overall: 5.25/6 FINAL: 5/6

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