Overview: 2.75/3 - I took some points off because I felt like it was a little short. It must have been a tough decision for Andrew to leave his family to further his hockey career. It's cool that he could have played at Princeton if the VHL didn't work out. Your writing skills seem pretty good, hopefully you come back here and become active again because I think you definitely could become a good 2 way forward if you want.
Grammar: 2/2 - A few mistakes.
Sorensen was born in Florida but his family moved to Minnesota when his mother got a job transfer to manage a small town hospital when he learned the game of hockey at a young age and excelled in his youth league where he developed a reputation at a young age for his mature hockey IQ. = Run on sentence
its anticipated that = it's anticipated that
there's further holes in his game = there are further holes in his game
Pros: 1/2 - Under 200 words and under 3 sentences for each one.
Cons: 1/2 -Under 200 words and under 3 sentences for each one.
Overall: 7.75/10